Thomas Ray

I like this. You better make this a little more happy in the next chapter, because, while I do like sad things, this character needs some joy in her life.
This story has potential, so good luck!

Really cool so far. The way it's written is very distinct, but if you did that on purpose, then well done. Either way, I'll read the rest.

This is pretty cool. Really good for a first poem.

As with most poems, there are some strange word choices here, but that isn't important. The emotional story it tells is awesome.

Interesting. I really like the description of the demons.

Interesting narration, murders, friends, sadness...... I like this so far.

I like this. It's told like a fairy tale in some ways, and I feel like you're leading up to something, which is one of the most important feelings to communicate in writing. I'll be reading the other prequels when you submit them.

Unfair! I was just getting to know this character, and you killed them. This is the second time this has happened to me today, too.
Well, anyway, this is cool.