United States • 21 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Can't wait to see where this is going, eek! You did a great job conveying that Georgie liked Shaydon. Keep writing, you're really good!
Very entertaining! You have a few grammatical errors, such as using commas when necessary. If you used the names of the characters a bit more when they talked, it would make it more clear as to who is speaking. I think that's about it. You're really talented!
Very very intrigued. Can’t wait to see what happens next to this band of friends
This is great! You did rly good! I think you could be a bit more descriptive, though. When you wrote "they stopped hugging," I felt you could put a bit more into that. Maybe something along the lines of, "they immediately pulled away, giving nervous chuckles." Other than that, you did really, really well! Keep writing, you're going somewhere!
Very intriguing! A few grammatical errors, but those are easy to fix. Keep going, you're very talented!
Can’t wait to see where this goes!!!