United States • 18 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
First of all, that painter needs therapy.
Second, when writing dialogue, create a new paragraph for each new person speaking.
and lastly, try not to switch point-of-view in the middle of the story. It gets confusing for the reader.
Please, dont give up! I enjoy reading and watching your progress and I would absolutely hate myself if one day you were just gone. Please, I'm begging you. I know you can get through this. You just have to stay strong. If you wont do it for yourself, do it for me. Please...
Glad I don't have a sister XD
Oh, wait I am the sister-
You did great! I enjoyed reading it! Just a few grammatical mistakes, but that's alright. As you said, it's your first time. Great job! You abused the caps a little bit, but that's a minor mistake. I loved the positivity! Keep writing, you're going places! <3
Very intriguing! A few grammatical errors, but those are easy to fix. Keep going, you're very talented!
Very entertaining! You have a few grammatical errors, such as using commas when necessary. If you used the names of the characters a bit more when they talked, it would make it more clear as to who is speaking. I think that's about it. You're really talented!