Australia • 20 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Woah!! I love the rhyming, and so smoothly you explained all that... no words. Keep it up.
That's beautiful!
it really good
touching
i love it
i love it
This is phenomenal. I can't remember reading anything so captivating and tragic. This story went places I didn't expect, and I'm just sitting here stunned because this idea is so good.
The one, ONE thing that I think could use some work is your sentence length; there could be a few more short sentences. (but personally I feel like the longer, continuous sentences create a sense of helpless repetition that suits the story perfectly.)
Anyway, I love this so much.
so g00d