United States • 20 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
This is100% me
this is good, but you might want to consider an editor! i can see a pattern of grammatical errors, and that's okay! writing takes a lot of work.
~ oddy
Keep up the good work. You are a great writer
That so good
You're building suspense well, and I like the detail about her makeup running. There are a few spelling mistakes, 'her' when I think you meant 'here', but keep practising and you'll get better.
Wow!! Do you still talk to each other??
I am impressed!
Indeed they were best friends and sad that his mom died!
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I loved the idea but it had a few mistakes and errors in between.
XOXO,
Sansid
The opening is good, it draws the reader in. The basic premise is promising.
You made a few mistakes with punctuation, there should be more commas and capital letters in some places. 'Its all right Emma, I'll come and get you' is one example; comma after Emma. One or two names start with lower case letters. Deal with that and this will be better still.
it's pretty cute and fairly relatable too.