IanG

This is a good piece, it evokes both poverty and nature vividly.

Your generation is not the first to go through this, but that proves that its possible to get through problems and come out the other side. When I was a teenager there were moral panics over punk rock, racial tensions and changing gender roles. Perhaps some adults forget this. That said, things arn't exactly the same now. Climate change and Covid-19 were not big issues then. I hope you and your generation come out of this wiser and stronger, but with your spirit intact.

You evoke the setting very well, especially the swim on the summers day.

You set the scene well. I can visualise the little boy lying in bed.

No shame in being a mix of strength and weakness, that's true for me and everyone I know.

The pigeon and what it left is a witty touch. I've heard before that people in dry climates welcome rain so that rings true. In my native Britain rain means gloom, but I can see why things would be different in a desert.

You should've used capital letters for God and you forgot it for Snow the first time you mentioned her. That said, its an interesting subject for animal lovers and nature lovers. Keep practising and you'll improve.

A sweet story and also a timely one about taking others as they are.