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Intriguing. A sequel would be real cool.

Yikes.
Creeped me out. Good job!
As mentioned before, this story needs some revision. Some periods are missing, and some sentences have grammar mistakes such as "'We closed now,'". I didn't know if that intentional if the creepy dude spoke weirdly, or a sloppy mistake.
Anyway, besides that, you did an amazing job! Can' wait for more.

Great story, Feminist123! But maybe change the age to 12+ since there's a bad word? Besides that, it's great! Keep it up! :)

Dang. Short, yet deep. And yes, I do understand the meaning. People sometimes only sees the surface of this poem, but I can see all the way to the bottom. The setting, (Catalina?), the pills (not gonna spill ;P), the friendship.

Anyway, great poem! Keep up the good work!

Very good and I love it! Great start. But I hope in the next chapter we know the name of the main character and like Thomas Ray said, this person needs some joy.

it's very simple, but hold such a deep meaning! Keep it up!

Aw, this is so sweet. It's slightly weird, but it's so true! Beautifully written in few words. Keep it up!

Everyday of my life sucked until I read this.
I kind of really feel bad for them though...