Sansid

The opening was really cool... it actually draw my attention. I love the story and there meeting and stuff. I feel that u should write in more description that will make it more interesting and it will definitely draws more attention.
It creates a scene in the reader's mind.

Yes, I agree with @IanG... punctuation was an issue and there were some spelling mistakes also.

Overall, I have to say, you are great, dude! Keep it up!

XOXO,
Sansid

Agreed IanG.... she is definitely making suspense.... I like when u mentioned that he wasn't a human...
I started thinking about it and I think that he should I guess be a spirit of her mom who has changed her appearance but then...

Xoxo,
Sansid

I think it was pretty cool... but I felt like u wanna end the story somehow that's why u started this thing and then the crash and then she died.
I was thinking about her journal and her dad... I can't imagine losing his wife and daughter... I think you should have done something else. I mean... I am not offensive or saying that it is bad and what the hell?? But I am just telling u my opinion.
I hope u understand me! I am kinda blunt but please, understand me!
Sending u love and light!

XOXO,
Sansid

It was really beautiful!

Wow! Cool

Wow!!! Amazing! @_vidhi_3015

Um... you have made a few mistakes. Like spelling mistakes, that's all and otherwise... it's gr8!