Optimism101

Op. Bees, you love em and you hate em. Otherwise, it's a nice poem!

I like it. Its a good poem, I just feel that some of the word choice and flow could be improved. Still a good poem though.

It's... blood boiling. I swear to god if I get my hands on that son of a bi-... Nope, gotta keep it PG. Still. It's a nice story. I think it could be polished a bit, but it's very close to perfect. Keep writing! We will keep reading!

"You can't break what's already broken" A sad life motto. Nice poem, nice wording. I hope you continue with your work!

I like the concept. It looks like it could be formulated into something wonderful. However, I feel it could use some punctuation, as well as some spelling edits. In time, I bet it will be awesome!

Nice! Its good work, and really good! I can't wait for it to be finished!

A nice creeps story. Gives chills. I feel it could use another draft though! Just some simple stuff, the basic more description stuff, less I's, etc. But other than that, you have a nice premise, and a nice creeps story. You're so close! Keep writing! We will keep reading!

So0o0o0oOo0oo, I liked it. It's a good work, it could just use some fine tuning. I'm not trying to be rude, I just wanna help. I think that you did a cool thing with the last 2-3 lines. The last two with their rhyme hit pretty hard and worked really well, but it didn't mesh very well with the top portion. I feel like if you make that top part rhyming, or even just close-ish then it could do a lot better. Maybe try doing some flow exercises too. Either way, it's a good piece, and you're well on your way. Safe travels! Stay optimistic!