United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Your writing style is awesome. "And yes, it was very dramatic," gets me every time. The narrator has a voice, and it's a fun one.
Still don't know about the bacon theme, though.
This is so good! I love it.
This is perfect
Arite, I wanna read everything you write from here on out. I'm really really annoying these.
Very nice. Very punchy writing, communicates the fear very well. The one thing I noticed was the part near the beginning when it talks about diving under the covers as quickly as possible, I would just say they dived, the context of the dive communicates the panic perfectly already. Dives are never slow, after all. :)
Anyway, I really like it. Especially the first half, it felt very fresh and clear.
Emotions are so important! Nice job.
I want this to be a song
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Well. This is satisfying.
I love it.