United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Arite, I wanna read everything you write from here on out. I'm really really annoying these.
Very nice. Very punchy writing, communicates the fear very well. The one thing I noticed was the part near the beginning when it talks about diving under the covers as quickly as possible, I would just say they dived, the context of the dive communicates the panic perfectly already. Dives are never slow, after all. :)
Anyway, I really like it. Especially the first half, it felt very fresh and clear.
Emotions are so important! Nice job.
I want this to be a song
...
Well. This is satisfying.
I love it.
I won't ask for more. I've loved it!
Very emotional. Very immersive. You're probably getting annoyed with these five stars, but honestly, "good" just doesn't cut it
I really think this could be an amazing song. It's not perfect, but I think all it needs to be a song is a tune!