United States • 21 y/o • MaleReviews Received
This is great! You did rly good! I think you could be a bit more descriptive, though. When you wrote "they stopped hugging," I felt you could put a bit more into that. Maybe something along the lines of, "they immediately pulled away, giving nervous chuckles." Other than that, you did really, really well! Keep writing, you're going somewhere!
Can’t wait to see where this goes!!!
Yayy! So good!
I understand completely. kudos to you for powering through! :)
Ophelia
omg, i have tears in my eyes. Oh, its fake. Thank God...
I'm not sure if Lyn is actually me, but I like to think that it is. Great story, it really touched my heart. I hope you and Chloe continue to blossom in each other's company. Keep writing, it was beautiful <3
this was reaLLy powerful. i love the emotion