United States • 20 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
It was good... though I didn't enjoy that much and you could hv used more of pronouns than Steven!
it okay
This is a good start for a young writer. If you want to improve it, explain why the princess is always so sad. Perhaps her father offended the same witch who turned the prince into a bear and so she's under a curse too. If not, perhaps someone she cared about died young for some reason.
Um... you have made a few mistakes. Like spelling mistakes, that's all and otherwise... it's gr8!
I guess you should write a bit more, I mean like I started reading a part and then, in a few seconds it's over... I mean the story is gr8 but it is really slow!
I hope u get it what I am trying to say... :)
I believe her killer is the man i who dropped her off and his angry wife.
