yo this is deep, but I honestly love it!!
I'm not quite a big fan of this story in particular if you had of added more story before this and had less grammar problems in this piece of text I would've enjoyed it more.
I honestly love this piece of writing there is nothing I would change about it, hope you make a part two.
You could've punctuated this better and added a better back story/origin but other then that it's pretty good.
Yo, this is so awesome!!
Yooooo this was so cool :D
This is actually really good!!