Black Sheep

Okay a few things, on the very first sentence there should be a comma after right, in the 2nd paragraph, the last part should end with a period. In the last paragraph at the beginning I think you meant while instead of why, and then when the dialogue switches to the next person, a new paragraph should start. Okay, now on to the next part, I thought it was really great and cant wait to read part 2. Love the plot so far.

this is good keep it up

GUd sO fAr

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I SMELL a ship :>

GUrLl yASsS

That was so beautiful....Amazing and powerful.

People need things like this.

I CarE :3

AWWWWWW Saylarter is officially Saylas and Carter's ship name...