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Your such a good writer! This is amazing. Just a tip for future writing. When writing one line of speech, and wanting to do a second one add more description around, so it's more of a narrative, and it'll be a future skill for writing. Other than that, great. Will there be part 4?

gurl you need to give me advice on how to write like you-
LOVED THE STORY

Miv, this is a really good short story, you've really put it into one nice masterpiece that really fits in really well. Your brilliant word choices, make this short story, really effective and really put a good effect on the reader. Just brilliant. Keep up the good work, and I'll be here to give you 5 stars!

my heart- (ik what u mean, by it never happened to you, but wrote it, that's me in a couple of words, anyway moving on to what I'm writing this for-) this was really good, Lyn. All those short sentences really put this all together. The simple sentences really puts an emotional effect on the reader, your word choices were really effective and rhymed in a weird way.
PERFECTTT

Simply, flawless.

I love your formatting. The poem was amazing

this is so sad and sweet. im so sorry, i really am

Just wow-